Our assignment this week is to find or write
the longest sentence you can and rewrite it using fewer words without losing
any effectiveness. After reviewing the Paramedic Method I knew that I was
guilty of using the confusing run-on sentences. I decided to look through my
previous blogs and found more run-on sentences than I care to speak about. The following
sentence is an example of run-on that comes from one of my very own blogs.
My first step to writing a paper or essay is
researching my topic, which probably takes more time than it should due to not
narrowing my topic; next is browsing through articles, which turns into more
researching because I’m not finding what I want; and finally printing
them. (wow is all I can say)
The revision:
Researching the topic and printing information
initiates my writing process.
Revising a sentence using the Paramedic Method
on my own is a lesson in itself, especially when it’s a sentence of your own.
The paramedic method defines how to repair a long, confusing sentence within its
name. I now understand that the quality of
words is more important than quantity of the words. I have to admit that I used these sentences to
help with my word count but now these sentences will be harder for me use.
I would think of long, drawn out sentences to help with my word count. Then, I found out about the Paramedic Method. I thought having longer sentences with big words would help me seem smarter, but apparently I was just doing it backwards. I honestly had no idea about this method, but now that I do, just one more thing to help my writing.
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